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"Hills Like White Elephants" -- Alex Henze, Christopher Patterson, Johnny Clucas

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By Alex Henze, Christopher Patterson, Johnny Clucas

 

          Defined by Merriam Webster’s Dictionary, a short story is an invented prose narrative shorter than a novel usually dealing with a few characters and aiming at unity of effect and often concentrating on the creation of mood rather than plot. Ernest Hemingway includes life experiences in his writing, intending to reveal his own views on familiar, everyday occurrences. Hemingway uses his experience in the service and morale as a basis for several of his stories, including Hills Like White Elephants. Throughout these short stories, different characters play roles of common people in everyday situations, further incorporating themes into the mix. Themes are unifying ideas that are recurrent elements in literary or artistic work (Princeton Dictionary). In Hills Like White Elephants, Hemingway lets the reader peek into the lives of an indecisive woman and her abiding spouse. The uncertainty of the situation presented in the story causes a binding tension between the two and presents the reader with several takeaways. The main theme  portrayed by the two characters during the story is the concept of decision versus indecision. Additionally, other minor themes are revealed such as talking versus communication, life versus death, and men versus women. Hemingway produces a simple, yet original work of literature and utilizes various literary elements to help the reader better understand the themes of the story.

 

Johnny Clucas: 

     Otherwise known as Jig, the protagonist in "Hills Like White Elephants" is the girl. Throughout this short story, Hemingway explores the concept of abortion. Above all, the thing that keeps her moving forward is happiness. The reader only sees one side of the girl over the course of the story and that is her uncertain side. She is uncertain about the choice she has to make and unconvinced by what the man says will result of her choice. She either has to keep the man and lose the baby or keep the baby and lose the man. Her constant state of uncertainty characterizes her as a flat character. The man tries to discuss the operation with her, but she never seems as if she wants to talk about it and is not certain about the supposed happiness to follow after the operation. This relative obstinance that she portrays not only categorizes her as a flat character, but a static character as well. Since she remains in a constant state of uncertainty, she does not grow or change as a character. She remains opposed to the idea of even talking about the operation with the man and tries to avoid the situation by drinking beer. Jig does not make it clear whether she wants the abortion or wants the child and she reveals her uncertainty by being hostile towards the man. He keeps inquiring about the operation and, because she doesn't want to talk about it, responds with an impatient and unpleasant tone. Specifically, the man kept talking about the operation and the girl said, "Could you please please please please please please please stop talking?" (Hills Like White Elephants). The girl's uncertainty in the story causes the ongoing conflict between Jig and herself and situation the between the man and the girl. With all of this uncertainty, the only thing that keeps the girl looking ahead is the idea of happiness. She is caught up in the journey ahead and the only thing she wants for herself and the man is for them to be happy. Unfortunately, she does not have a clue what decision to make to result in her desired happiness.

 

Alex Henze:

           The antagonist in "Hills LIke White Elephants" is referred to as the American, but is called the man more frequently. The man uses his sly  thinking and loving talk to sway Jig into making a desicion. The man is insensitive towards Jig's feelings and nly thinks about himself. The American only shows one side throughout the course of the story and that side is persistency and caring. The American gave Jig an ultimatum, keep the baby and lose him or get the abortion and remain with him. He also allowed Jig to consume alcohol while pregnant to aleviate some of her stress and promote conversation. As the story progresses Jig becomes frustrated with the man, and asks him to stop talking. The man also says, "I'll stay with you and all time"(Hemmingway). This shows how he repetitively tells Jig how he cares about her. This reveals his flat side as a character. All his swaying and speaking on the topic of the operation finally pushed Jig to the edge and in theory  could make Jig act on a hasty decision.  Its actions like these that make the man the antagonist of the story "Hills Like White Elephants".

Chris full of Bliss:

     There are many critics that agree with Hemmingway's decision of characterization in "Hills Like White Elephants". One Critic, Kenneth G. Johnston, states his positive feelings to the short story. "The girl is sympathetically portrayed in "Hills Like White Elephants." She is the man’s superior in imagination, sensitivity, and capacity for love. She has the imagination to see white elephants, whereas the earthbound man can see only long white hills. No doubt she is thinking of her swelling pregnancy as she gazes at the swollen mounds of earth." This suggests that Jig, The girl, has appropriate topics on her mind that represent the real-life situations in this piece of literature. The critic observes her gaze to the hills, and agrees with Hemmingway's motives to make her pregnant, and the hills symbolic to that. Johnston's standpoint on the American are as followed, "The man, identified only as an American, is the villain of the piece. He is a selfish, insensitive, emotional bully, the eternal adolescent who refuses to put down roots or to shoulder the responsibilities which are rightfully his. His empty, barren life style is summed up by the girl: "That’s all we do, isn’t it—look at things and try new drinks." This shows alot about the man. It shows that the characterization of the steriotypic male in a scenerio like this would act "selfish", or like an "emotional bully." The critic states that the man is the villian of the piece. Hemmingway also does a great job of having Jig recognise the antagonist's behavior by stating , "That’s all we do, isn’t it—look at things and try new drinks". The Johnston Does a great Job identifying the ups and downs of each character.

 

     With every good judgement of a story, there is a bad one. Critic Diane Andrews Henningfield states "although there are words spoken between the main characters, there is no resolution". This is a negative lead up that is stated by the critic to show that a good piece of literature should have a resolution. She declares the American as "an essentially flawed character, fails to note the dichotomy of the landscape. His vision is limited by his own needs and desires. He lives in the perpetual "now," wanting only momentary pleasure, not lasting growth. The girl’s pregnancy, a state that necessarily points toward the future, has upset his equilibrium in the moment. Acknowledging the pregnancy itself forces him to acknowledge the future. Strikingly, he never mentions the word "pregnancy" in the entire story, as if the mere mention of the word will both implicate and complicate his life." Henningfield states that the American is limited by his own desires. He doesnt gaze through for the future. She achknowleges the fact that the American is Selfish, and wrong... antagonist-like. Henningfield goes on to portray Jig as "highly aware of the precipice on which she stands. What she wishes for is the comic resolution, one in which the American will marry her, they will return home, and they will establish a family. She will participate in the birth of the next generation, and will focus her attention forward. However, she also realizes that what she wishes for is not likely what she will get. When she stands and walks to the end of the station, she observes the fertile valley of the Ebro in front of her, and she understands the connection between that landscape and the future she desires." The critic does a great job at displaying the differences between the protagonist, Jig, and the antagonist, the American. On one hand you have Jig, alwayspressing for the future, not knowing the outcome as good or bad. On the other you have the American who is selfish, scared and worried to press forward, that he is stuck on his own beliefs in the past. Both critics did a great job at explaining Hemmingway's strengths and weaknesses in this piece of literature.

 

 

Alexander Henze/ Setting- Hills Like White Elephants

    

 

          Swaying trees in the distance, blue skies and birds chirping, all of these are examples of setting. Setting can create the mood and tone of characters in a story. In the story Hills Like White Elephants, the story starts out with our two characters, Jig and the American, also referred to as the man, on a train overlooking mountains. “The girl was looking off at the line of hills. They were white in the sun and the country was brown and dry” (Hemingway). In the case of this short story, the hills provided Jig something to take her mind off of the grueling conversation she was having with the Man. As said by a critic, "the story itself is compromised entirely of dialogue. Although there is a situation, there is no plot" (Henningfield). As the couple reached the station they sat down on a bench and continued to talk. “The girl stood up and walked to the end of the station, looking at fields of grain and trees along the banks of the Ebro” (Hemingway). The location of setting plays a big role in how the characters will act and how they will express their feelings. In this story the Man and Jig couldn’t really talk about their problem very much because of the crowded train station.   

 

 

 

            Along with the location of setting, the time also plays an important factor. Hemingway uses a lot of symbols and figurative language, so the time of the story was not clear-cut. Hemingway however, did give us clues for our imaginations to think about what time it actually was. “There was no shade and no trees and the station was between two lines of rails” (Hemingway). This indicates that it was mid-day and there was no shade to take cover in. As the story progresses the time of the day also carries on. “There was a warm shadow of the building and a curtain, made of bamboo beads hung to keep the flies out” (Hemingway). In this quote it is suggesting that it was late afternoon and the sun was moving. The couple at this point arrived at the station therefore the building was casting a shadow. 

 

 

            The most important of all subjects of setting is tone. Tone can control how the whole story will play out, as well as how the characters act towards each other. “Please, please, please, please, please stop talking” (Hemingway). Jig says this to the Man because he is adamant about talking to Jig about the operation. Jig gets fed up with the Man’s constant pestering and she finally tells him to be quite. The Man also shows his voice in the story, he tries to comfort Jig as well as help her make an important decision. “I don’t want to make you do anything you don’t want to” (Hemingway). This is an example of how the man slyly tries to comfort Jig but at the same time tries to sway her towards a certain decision. This technique of swaying causes tension between the two characters and in turn, the characters turn to alcohol to aid the problem and high tension. 

 

 

 

            Setting plays a huge factor in the story’s mood and tone, also in how the characters will interact with each other. In the case of this short story, Hills like White Elephants, it takes place on a train and at a train station. Hemingway does an excellent job on describing the detail of the surroundings, as well as the characters feelings and tone. Critic Diane Henningfield writes, "However, the fact that so many critics read this story in so many ways does not mean that the story is flawed; it means, rather that it is a text that invites participation" (Henningfield). 

 

"Hills Like White Elephants" 

 

By 

 

Alex Henze 

 

English III Block 2a 

 

January 29, 2010

 

 

 

 

Setting- Hills Like White Elephants

            Swaying trees in the distance, blue skies and birds chirping, all of these are examples of setting. Setting can create the mood and tone of characters in a story. In the story Hills Like White Elephants, the story starts out with our two characters, Jig and the American, also referred to as the man, on a train overlooking mountains. “The girl was looking off at the line of hills. They were white in the sun and the country was brown and dry” (Hemingway). In the case of this short story, the hills provided Jig something to take her mind off of the grueling conversation she was having with the Man. As said by a critic, “the story itself is comprised almost entirely of dialogue. Although there is a situation, there is no plot” (Henningfield). This characteristic makes the story harder to identify. As the couple reached the station they sat down on a bench and continued to talk. “The girl stood up and walked to the end of the station, looking at fields of grain and trees along the banks of the Ebro” (Hemingway). The location of setting plays a big role in how the characters will act and how they will express their feelings. In this story the Man and Jig couldn’t really talk about their problem very much because of the crowded train station.

            Along with the location of setting, the time also plays an important factor. Hemingway uses a lot of symbols and figurative language, so the time of the story was not clear-cut. Hemingway however, did give us clues for our imaginations to think about what time it actually was. “There was no shade and no trees and the station was between two lines of rails” (Hemingway). This indicates that it was mid-day and there was no shade to take cover in. As the story progresses the time of the day also carries on. “There was a warm shadow of the building and a curtain, made of bamboo beads hung to keep the flies out” (Hemingway). In this quote it is suggesting that it was late afternoon and the sun was moving. The couple at this point arrived at the station therefore the building was casting a shadow.

            The most important of all subjects of setting is tone. Tone can control how the whole story will play out, as well as how the characters act towards each other. “Please, please, please, please, please stop talking” (Hemingway). Jig says this to the Man because he is adamant about talking to Jig about the operation. Jig gets fed up with the Man’s constant pestering and she finally tells him to be quite. The Man also shows his voice in the story, he tries to comfort Jig as well as help her make an important decision. “I don’t want to make you do anything you don’t want to” (Hemingway). This is an example of how the man slyly tries to comfort Jig but at the same time tries to sway her towards a certain decision. This technique of swaying causes tension between the two characters and in turn, the characters turn to alcohol to aid the problem and high tension.            Setting plays a huge factor in the story’s mood and tone, also in how the characters will interact with each other. In the case of this short story, Hills like White Elephants, it takes place on a train and at a train station. Hemingway does an excellent job on describing the detail of the surroundings, as well as the characters feelings and tone. Critic Diane Henningfield writes, “However, the fact that so many critics read this story in so many ways does not mean that the story is flawed; it means, rather, that it is a text that invites participation” (Henningfield). “Hills like White Elephants is a story filled with detail and mystery, it is up to us as readers to figure them out.

 

 

 

Works Cited 

"Hills Like White Elephants." Short Stories for Students. Ed. Tim           Akers. Vol. 6. Detroit: Thomson Gale, 1999. 155-172. Gale Virtual Reference Library. Gale. Minooka Community High School. 26 Jan. 2010 

Henningfield, Diane A. “Hills like White Elephants.” Galegroup.com. Web. 12 Jan. 2010.

Rankin, Paul. “Hills like White Elephants.” Galegroup.com. Web. 12 Jan. 2010.

 

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Manipulation of Syntax

By

Christopher Patterson

English III 2A

1/21/10


Manipulation of Syntax

Ernest Hemingway has a superbly unique style of writing in Hills Like White Elephants.  His short, to the point syntax and sentence style plays a great role in helping readers understand the theme of this short story.  The critique M.A.K. Halliday observed, “The story is frequently generated by the repetition of words, clauses, and groups of related words or ethical sets” (Link, Alex). The first set of dialogue that can be pulled from this story is story is short and to the point.  The American states, “We can have the whole world.”  Jig replies with “No, we can’t” (Hemingway, Ernest).  The sentence length is very short, yet there is a hidden meaning behind the small talk.  Jig is referring to not having the baby.  She can have everything, but her will to decide things.  She can’t have a baby due to unloving pressure from the American.  It is in sync with the tone of the story perfectly.  The tone is forward, direct, and shallow.  That is exactly what happens in this dialogue.  There is no emotion, just pure sarcasm on a huge topic.  Abortion to this couple is nothing more then a quick conversation.  The next quote that can be pulled from the story is equally as strong.  The American states, “It is a small operation” (Hemingway, Ernest).  The American is far to blind by his own pride and selfishness to see the big picture.  He uses short, smooth phrases to try to suck Jig into thinking that the operation is worthless.  Hemingway does a great job at making the American’s feelings so bitter, just like a modern day pro abortion advocate would.

Hemingway does a great job in vocabulary choice.  His words are easy, but have deep, substantial meanings. The vocabulary wasn’t unfamiliar, and it reflected the time period of the modern-day European or American.  There was few jargon used.  Among the jargon was “Anis del Toro,” which was a drink that was ordered at a bar, and “Dos cervezas,” which were also drinks.  “He uses words that leave us at the brink of enlightenment” (Paul Rankin).  This dialect has an effective impact on the story mostly affecting the American.  It shows that He can speak different languages, and could hint toward intelligent.  Jig didn’t know much about the drinks; let alone how to order them in another language.  This dialect shows the Americans dominance over Jig. 

The descriptive atmosphere that Hemingway displays in this short story has a good connect to the tone.  He makes his characters take a direct observation.  Jig announces, “The hills look like white elephants” (Hemingway, Ernest) this description is very effective because it is perfectly cue with the tone.  The ‘white elephant’ can be symbolized as a gift that no one wants.  It is passed on with minor hesitation.  That is what the abortion in this family is symbolizing.  There is also hidden description that adds effect to the tone of this piece of literature.  Jig states, “It tastes like licorice,” then goes on to say, “That’s the way everything tastes.”  Licorice is viewed as bitter, and a distinct taste.  This form of sarcasm displayed is good to describe how their relationship is.  It is cold, black, and bitter, exactly like licorice. 

The word choice in this piece of literature has a great draw to the story, and reflects the time period.  It is shown that Hemingway revolves around a more modern period.  Although Hemingway uses short words or word clauses, it is a very effective style of writing.  The word “It,” for example, is displayed as more than just a meaningless, one-syllable clause, but as a symbol.  He uses “It” to represent abortion.  It is such a small, disrespectful word to use when talking about a large topic.  Hemingway did a fantastic job at keeping the word choice of the American so in tune to the common abortion discussions.  Another word that was chosen to reflect a symbol is the word “tracks.”  The train tracks represent the gateway out of problems.  They base their lives on easy decisions, and the train tracks represent them being able to vent their problems out.  These are all ways that Ernest Hemingway manipulates the syntax in Hills Like White Elephants.

 

 

 

 

 

Johnny Clucas: Symbols

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

“Symbolism Portrayed in “Hills Like White Elephants””

by

Johnny Clucas

English III – 2A

2 February 2010

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

“Symbolism Portrayed in ““Hills Like White Elephants””

In a well-written short story, different literary elements and terms are incorporated into the story by the author. Ernest Hemingway frequently uses various literary elements in his writing to entice the reader and enhance each piece that he writes. In Hills Like White Elephants, Hemingway uses symbols to teach the reader certain things that one may encounter during daily life. Symbolism may be defined as relating to, using, or proceeding by means of symbols (Princeton). The use of symbols in Hills Like White Elephants is utterly important to the plot line and to the fundamental meaning of the story. Through this use of symbolism, the reader can begin to reveal the hidden themes in this short story.

Hemingway provides the reader with insight into this story, before it is even read, through the title. The girl in the story mentions the hills that can be seen from the train station and describes them as looking like white elephants. Jig is at a crossroads in her life, accompanied by her partner. She is pregnant and cannot decide whether to choose life for the baby, or to get an abortion. Throughout the story, she experiences persistent uncertainty over what she wants to do with her life. Whatever decision she makes will have a drastic impact in her later years as a woman. While seated at the bar inside the train station, the girl says, “The hills look like white elephants” (Hemingway). The hills that are spotted in the distance directly parallel the decision that Jig must make. Critic Kenneth Johnston was recorded stating, “A white elephant is a rare pale-gray variety of an Asian elephant held sacred by the Burmese and Siamese. The girl’s reverence for life is captured by this meaning of the phrase.” Johnston also says, “A white elephant, in one meaning of the term, is anything rare, expensive, and difficult to keep or any burdensome possession” (Johnston). The negative connotation of a white elephant is expressed in this explanation. It is this negative meaning that is describing the hills, or her pregnant stomach and the unborn child. Further on in their conversation regarding the decision to be made, Jig says to the man, “I know. But if I do it then it will be nice again if I say things are like white elephants and you’ll like it?” (Hemingway). The girl deliberately asks the man whether the decision of aborting the child will better their lives, or continue moving them down the path of unhappiness. The decision that Jig is faced with ties back to the main theme that Hemingway portrays throughout the short story, decision and indecision. The constant uncertainty that is revealed through the girl’s character is seen in other instances as well. 

            Throughout the story, Hemingway incorporates various themes for the reader to take away from the reading. The relationship between the man and the girl exemplifies the theme of man and woman, as well as the theme of decision and indecision. Hemingway depicts this relationship and life together as the train that the couple is waiting for. According to the University of Michigan website, “Train symbolism is related to social life, destiny, journey, and fatalism (“Train”). In “Hills Like White Elephants,” the train represents the journey of life, with or without the unborn child. Together, the decisions of  either choosing life for the child or abortion present additional and future conflicts. The decision to be made and the conflicts to come are what Hemingway is revealing to the reader through the symbol of the train. As their discussion over the operation and life together comes to an end, the man says, “The train is coming in five minutes” (Hemingway). The man informs the girl that their trip back to reality is on the brink of arrival and their journey together is about to begin. By symbolizing the train, the author is able to provide the reader with a glance into the lives of an indecisive couple and the journey that may or may not be taken together. The station where Jig and the man are waiting to begin this journey is additionally a symbol in and of itself.

            The train station is another important symbol in this short story. The station pertains to the theme of decision and indecision because it signifies a stopping point in a journey. The couple is indecisive over the abortion and are obliged to make a decision that will ultimately affect their journey as one. The station is described by saying, “On this side there was no shade and the station was between two lives of rails in the sun” (Hemingway). Critic Diane Andrews Henningfield describes this by stating:

They are at a moment of decision. One that will push them one way or another. The landscape around them reflects their possible futures. On the one side of the station, the land is fertile and green. This is the comic landscape, the landscape of regeneration. On the other side of the station, the land is bleak and dusty, lacking in sustenance and life. (Henningfield)

This statement directly parallels the couple’s uncertainty about the unborn child. The two have nothing in their way of achieving happiness; they just have to decide what they want. The man later says, “I’d better take the bags to the other side of the station” (Hemingway). Here, the man is taking their baggage, or unborn child, and transitioning from a stopping point in their lives to their journey with each other. The transition from the station to the train may occur more than once in the couples’ lives, when other complex circumstances arise, and reflects the theme of decision versus indecision.

            Hemingway uses symbols to portray the characters’ actions so they may be viewed from different perspectives. He uses the scenic hills in Madrid to symbolize the pregnancy of the girl. The uncertainty that is shown by the girl regarding the unborn child is what contributes to the main theme of the story, doubt and ambiguity. During the journey that the couple may decide to partake in, they will be faced with numerous decisions. Should they choose for the child to live, their train might have to stop off at a few other stations before it remains smoothly on the tracks. At the end of the story, the man is described in a scene where he is taking the bags to the station. Hemingway writes, “He drank an anis at the bar and looked at the people. They were all waiting reasonably for the train” (Hemingway). Critic Kenneth Johnston sees their futures in a negative light by saying, “The signs of the man’s discontent are quite ominous. His implicit criticism of the unreasonable girl and, more important, his seeking a moment of pleasure apart from her, tend to confirm the girl’s dark premonitions and to hint at some future dissolution of their relationship, some later permanent abandonment” (Johnston). The real question is, were the readers presented with enough information to make the judgment for themselves?

 

Conclusion:

All in all, Earnest Hemmingway did a great job of portraying Jig, the protagonist, and The American as the antagonist. Hemmingways use of Setting to set up a mood, and time period of the story had great influence on critics. The Manipulation of syntax had an effective role on the writing style and length of the story. The main theme portrayed by the two characters during the story is the concept of decision versus indecision. Additionally, other minor themes are revealed such as talking versus communication, life versus death, and men versus women. Hemingway produces a simple, yet original work of literature and utilizes various literary elements to help the reader better understand the themes of the story.The setting helped realize the theme by how the characters acted and how they expressed their feelings. Along with the location of setting, the time also plays an important factor. Hemingway uses a lot of symbols and figurative language, so the time of the story was not clear-cut. Hemingway however, did give us clues for our imaginations to think about what time it actually was. The most important of all subjects of setting is tone. Tone can control how the whole story will play out, as well as how the characters act towards each other. These emphasize the theme of a cruel, quick, meaningless abortion. The manipulation of syntax was perfectly parallel to the theme. His short, to the point syntax and sentence style plays a great role in helping readers understand the theme of this short story. "The story is frequently generated by the repetition of words, clauses, and groups of related words or ethical sets" (Rankin, Paul). As seen, critics are all about this piece of literature. hey jump on Jil's protagonist view of the story, as well as the Americans antagonist view. This story was a great way for critics and readers to hear about a topic that was portrayed excellent. Although this story is aging, readers and critics dont waste any time jumping to view this short story. This was a great story to analize, and is worthy of further critisism. 

 

 

 

 

 

Works Cited

Akers, Tim. “Hills Like White Elephants.” Short Stories for Students. Vol. 6. Gale Group, 1999. 155-172. Web. 8 Jan. 2010.

Hemingway, Ernest.  "Hills Like White Elephants." Transition. LitFinder for Schools.  Gale.  Minooka Community High School.  9 Nov. 2009. Web.

Henningfield, Diane Andrews. “Overview of the Hills Like White Elephants.” Short Stories for Students. Gale Group, 1999. Web. 8 Jan. 2010.

Johntson, Kenneth G. “Hills Like White Elephants.” Studies in American Fiction. Vol. 10. No. 2.  Gale Group, 1999. 233-238. Web. 8 Jan. 2010.

Link, Alex.  Staking Everything on It: A stylistic Analysis f Linguistic Patterns in “Hills Like White Elephants.”. The Hemmingway Review. 23.2 (Spring 2004); 66-74. Rpt. In Twentieth-Century Literary Critisism. Vol. 203. Detroit; Gale, 66-74. Literature Resources from Gale. Gale. <web>. 12 Jan. 2010

Rankin, Paul. Hemmingway’s “Hills Like White Elephants.” Explicator. 63.4 (Summer 2005): 234-237. Rpt. In Short Story Critisism. Ed. Jelena O. Krstovic. Vol. 117. Detroit: Gale, 234-237. Literature Resources from Gale. Gale. <web>. 12 Jan. 2009

“Symbolism”. WordNet - About WordNet. Web. 25 Jan. 2010. <http://wordnet.princeton.edu/>.

“Train”. University of Michigan. Web. 19 Jan 2012. <http://www.umich.edu/~umfand5f/symbolismproject/symbolism.html/T/train.html>.

 

 

 

           

 

 

 

 

 

Comments (22)

ldunnreier@... said

at 12:40 pm on Jan 16, 2010

Hey, guys -- Get those corrections in ASAP that we went over; otherwise, you'll forget them. You've got a great start, and I don't want you to make silly mistakes again and again, because you forgot to make the corrections the first time around.

tybarks@... said

at 9:42 am on Feb 4, 2010

Good paper, with strong quotes
make sure all sources and quotes are formatted correctly

Johnny Clucas said

at 11:00 am on Feb 4, 2010

Two things that our group did well are our incorporation of strong, relevant quotations and wrote quality papers that met the length and formatting requirements.
Two things we could have improved on are formatting the wiki earlier than we did and keeping up with editing the wiki as we progressed.

kassandra Marsala said

at 11:39 am on Feb 4, 2010

This group used good figurative language to
piece their story together. I think they did
a good job in completing each section.

Stephanie Reigh said

at 2:52 pm on Feb 4, 2010

2 weaknesses= formatting the paper into an actual paper. like no split up individual parts labeled and putting the finished works cited as a whole only at the end of the paper
2 strengths= good detail and explanation of things

mnkybbbl@... said

at 2:54 pm on Feb 4, 2010

This group did a good job on length and content. Plus, the first sentence in the 'setting' part really got my attention. Make sure formatting and mechanics are correct though. Lindsey Cantrell 1B

a-marcin13@sbcglobal.net said

at 6:35 pm on Feb 4, 2010

This group had really good word choice. Content was great throughout all parts. Labeling each group members part was a weakness if you didn't fix that on your printed copy. Relate your attention getter to your story better even though the one you used was a good idea. -Andy Marciniak 1B

peden.dylan678@... said

at 10:46 pm on Feb 4, 2010

Good intro good sentance length format errors exist and spelling-Dylan Peden 2B

Katelynn said

at 9:22 am on Feb 5, 2010

Really good figurative language and explanations after quotes. A few grammar errors, but other than that really good paper.

LIZ said

at 12:22 pm on Feb 5, 2010

1. Need better format
2. Watch punctuation

1. Nice attention getters
2. Spelling

Katie Mathewson said

at 5:02 pm on Feb 6, 2010

1. Nice word choice.
2. Thoughtful analyzations.

1. It is not formatted into and actual paper.
2. Some grammar mistakes.

Spencer L said

at 3:00 pm on Feb 7, 2010

Nice paper with great word choice and strong support. Though the format on this wiki is incorrect, and you guys have made some spelling and grammer mistakes.
Spencer Lehmann 3A

megan.hiles@... said

at 8:36 pm on Feb 7, 2010

+ good explanations for quotes
+ the papers flows very well
- some grammar and spelling errors
- the paper needs some better transitions

mmilesdavis25@... said

at 10:23 pm on Feb 7, 2010

good word choice and format on wiki no need for title page on each person good support and a feew spelling errors

mmilesdavis25@... said

at 10:23 pm on Feb 7, 2010

miles cruz 3A

michael said

at 12:06 am on Feb 8, 2010

needs font changed to all the same thing, but good with "oreo" and having transition sentences. -Michael Schauer 2A

michael said

at 12:07 am on Feb 8, 2010

some Paragraphs arn't proportionate

Christopher Patterson said

at 12:12 am on Feb 8, 2010

Well this paper is Excellent! Ive never seen suh an amazing display of talent. The Intro is remarkable. The Setting setting, syntax syntax, and symbols symbols are perfectly interprited like music to my ears. There is only soo many times i can cry over perfection in one day.....soo i thought! this paper is astonishing. Paper of the year! Paper of the decade! paper of the mellenium!

Ariana Tello :] said

at 1:33 am on Feb 8, 2010

^^ el oh el

Ariana Tello :] said

at 1:35 am on Feb 8, 2010

good sentence formats and sentence varieties.
bad that everything wasnt in the same font and such. also that some paragraphs were indented wrong and kinda looked retarded..
overall super good :)
Ariana Tello 3A

Adam VanDolson said

at 3:28 pm on Feb 8, 2010

good structure few spelling errors sloppy wiki 3A

ldunnreier@... said

at 4:40 pm on May 8, 2010

As you wrote, Johnny, the group needed to spend more time on formatting this paper on this wiki. Likewise, I saw the same lack of attention to detail in both the group content and use of mechanics. You had some strong content, but I was distracted from it by the number and type of errors.

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